Creative endeavours, pretentious and otherwise.

dyslexius · 24-10-06 14:08:39

The_West_Wind wrote:

Ok, Dyslexius. I'll post a bit of writing on a new thread.
Lets do this.

I went back there, TWW, and the thread is gone. I hope that means you decided to do a massive edit to your story and found it more convenient to just delete your post and repost later.

--dyslexius.

Burlesque · 24-10-06 15:13:06

Chicken, Nowaysis?

Somebody's creative outlet (that sure came out more pretentious than intended) is one of the few things I wouldn't poke fun at ... in public. I might smirk and scoff in the privacy of my own home, but I wouldn't let on. Really I wouldn't. In fact, I wanted to ask you to post some of your writing after your first post about it, but you sounded a little, well, shy about it, so I didn't ask. Now, however, this is what I have to say on the subject: post some of your writing, nowish, or I shall taunt you a second time!

Burlesque.

Dynamo · 24-10-06 16:43:20

I write songs from time to time and then record them on my digi mixer. I tried to uplaod a couple to Youtube but it says they are of an invalid file format, so until I can find an upload site for them, I'm afraid you'll all have to remain completely oblivious as to how bad they are.

Cheers. Dynamo.

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Nowaysis · 24-10-06 19:56:49

Burlesque wrote:

Chicken, Nowaysis?
Somebody's creative outlet (that sure came out more pretentious than intended) is one of the few things I wouldn't poke fun at ... in public. I might smirk and scoff in the privacy of my own home, but I wouldn't let on. Really I wouldn't. In fact, I wanted to ask you to post some of your writing after your first post about it, but you sounded a little, well, shy about it, so I didn't ask. Now, however, this is what I have to say on the subject: post some of your writing, nowish, or I shall taunt you a second time!
Burlesque.

Well then, challenge accepted.

We'll start off with something deadly serious, and so full of teen angst it'll make your eyelids curls back in horror:

The author within wrote:

There’s a man on top of a mountain
watching the world go round
watching it all go down
There’s a man on top of a mountain
looking down on us all
believing he makes the call
There’s a man on top of a mountain
thinking he’s in control
trying to save his soul
There’s a man on top of a mountain
trying hard to see
the way to be free
There’s a man on top of a mountain
I know not what he seeks
though I'm alone on these peaks

And to restore your spirits, after that ghastly exercise in navel gazing, something perhaps a tad more light hearted, a short little number that's mostly just an idea I didn't want to forget:

The author within wrote:

Honey, you send the tickles
down my palate
I want to bite you,
lick you,
tease you,
pop you,
tear you up
I want a good hard snog
with someone else
preferably someone with braces
Cause baby,
you're a blister on my tounge

--------

Now that I go through my stash of never-published-master pieces, I become very much aware of exactly how little of it is actually in English. For this specific purpose, taht poses something of a problem, seeing as the amount of works directly affects the amount of works I deem worthy of publication. However, as I write these very lines, a few pieces that might have stood the test of time come to mind. I will be back later with more introspective oral diarrhoea(sp?)

Nowaysis · 24-10-06 19:58:24

Dynamo: http://www.soundclick.com always worked very well for me. I think they restrict you to mp3-format, but it's completely free, and very easy to use.

Burlesque · 24-10-06 20:32:54

Well, Nowaysis ... *snicker*. No! Just kidding!

My honest, unwanted opinion (I'm very opinionated of late, I note with some tastefully restrained self-loathing) is that "The Man on Top of the Mountain" is a bit ... conventionally teen-angsty, yes, but the last stanza saves it, and the thing shows a visual flair that you should maintain at all costs: you create a powerful image in very few words, something I have noticed that few writers are capable of.

The other little poem, on the other hand, I love! Much more sure of itself, jaunty, funny and with a personal voice to it. Forget about the "just an idea I didn't want to forget" bit - it's great just the way it is.

(Phew. I'm lucky that your writing doesn't suck. I'm no good at keeping silent, and I'm no good at smiling cheerily and saying "Oh, what a nice aeroplane you've drawn ... oh, is it a dog, you say?" either.)

Burlesque.

Burlesque · 25-10-06 00:25:49

blissed wrote:

yes Burlesque is naked, that's what I'm seeing. Consider yourself lucky I've just drawn his head and shoulders

You don't know what you're missing!

Uncanny resemblance, Blissed, but what's with the squinting? I don't do that! I'll just assume that part is what you would call artistic license and I would call defamation.

Burlesque.

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The_West_Wind · 25-10-06 00:42:56

Yeah, the whole piece was just too big to present. Mind you that wasnt the whole story, but you can keep someones attention online for that long. I have to be realistic. If I can find something smaller, I'll see what I can do.

blissed · 25-10-06 01:40:00

Burlesque wrote:

blissed wrote:
yes Burlesque is naked, that's what I'm seeing. Consider yourself lucky I've just drawn his head and shoulders
You don't know what you're missing!
Uncanny resemblance, Blissed, but what's with the squinting? I don't do that! I'll just assume that part is what you would call artistic license and I would call defamation.
Burlesque.

Lol yeah you do that!! but only for about 10 seconds a day when your in the throws of extacy. Something that always happens in front of your computer you forget I'm omnipresent, I see all, you can't even hide stuff in draws I see that too and quite frankly.............no I'm gonna leave it there

Actually, you could at least take the fag out your mouth

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Burlesque · 25-10-06 09:36:53

blissed wrote:

Burlesque wrote:
Uncanny resemblance, Blissed, but what's with the squinting? I don't do that! I'll just assume that part is what you would call artistic license and I would call defamation.
Burlesque.
Lol. yeah you do that!! but only for about 10 seconds a day when your in the throws of extacy. Something that always happens in front of your computer you forget I'm omnipresent, I see all, you can't even hide stuff in draws I see that too and quite frankly.............no I'm gonna leave it there
Actually, you could at least take the fag out your mouth

Thanks for reminding me; it's been so long, since your posts have the unfortunate effect of killing my libido dead - there's just something about you that makes me never want to think about sex again. Funnily enough, I'm told I have pretty much the same effect on every woman I meet, so there you and I have something in common. Perhaps I should thank you for killing my sex drive, as I have no further use for it; before you came along I was considering donating it to science. Hence, I too am going to leave the stuff in my draws (and drawers, as it were) exactly where it is. I smoke as a substitute for virility, but my virulence is alive and well, so all is not lost.

Burlesque.

Journeyfan · 25-10-06 11:23:33

The_Elfman wrote:

By the way dyslexius I haven't commented on your music yet because I am currently in an emotional place where I cannot listen to music. It has such a profound effect on me that the results can be quite catastrophic. I have however downloaded them and I promise I will listen to them when my emotional equiibrium has stabilised.
Elfman

Elfman - I am sorry to hear that. I hope that you will very soon return to a state of "emotional equilibrium".

That you say that "the results can be quite catastrophic" is more than enough reason to leave music well alone at present.

(I too have been under a considerable amount of emotional stress of late, but in my case, I find that listening to the right choice of music, when I have half a chance to do so, tends to have a very cathartic effect on me).

Take good care of yourself my friend.

JF

(Sorry Dyslexius, the above comment is not meant to be reflective of your music not being the "right choice", as I too have yet to find a suitable time to listen without interruption, but like the Elf, I have downloaded them and will listen as soon as I can find the opportunity to give my undivided attention which I am sure it deserves).

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bodyhead · 25-10-06 16:42:05

dyslexius wrote:

Right here... Get your free ringtones, right here...
I wrote:
...I have a pair of Tibetan Prayer Cymbals (like tiny nipple-gongs, maybe two inches in diameter).
I just now recorded their sounds, and put them up here as a sort of demonstration (caution, scratchy voice of dyslexius also appears). I thought, well, since I have their natural sounds, let's have some fun. <snips>
--dyslexius

Sorry, just caught up with this. That's an extraordinary sound, and your voice reminds me of the broadcaster Peter Gzowski (a friend gave me a couple of tapes of his remembrance programme).

blissed · 25-10-06 16:48:05

Burlesque wrote:

blissed wrote:
Burlesque wrote:
Uncanny resemblance, Blissed, but what's with the squinting? I don't do that! I'll just assume that part is what you would call artistic license and I would call defamation.
Burlesque.
Lol. yeah you do that!! but only for about 10 seconds a day when your in the throws of extacy. Something that always happens in front of your computer you forget I'm omnipresent, I see all, you can't even hide stuff in draws I see that too and quite frankly.............no I'm gonna leave it there
Actually, you could at least take the fag out your mouth
Thanks for reminding me; it's been so long, since your posts have the unfortunate effect of killing my libido dead - there's just something about you that makes me never want to think about sex again. Funnily enough, I'm told I have pretty much the same effect on every woman I meet, so there you and I have something in common. Perhaps I should thank you for killing my sex drive, as I have no further use for it; before you came along I was considering donating it to science. Hence, I too am going to leave the stuff in my draws (and drawers, as it were) exactly where it is. I smoke as a substitute for virility, but my virulence is alive and well, so all is not lost.
Burlesque.

If you think as a specimen you have some insights to offer science, then allow yourself to submit to scientific experimentation Actually you get paid for that and it's easy unless something goes very badly wrong. Anyway, as long as somebody likes you Burlesque your sex drives not dead, and it's not just me that likes you, as you well know

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Burlesque · 25-10-06 19:16:52

You like me, Blissed? When did that happen?

My sex drive is so dead you could nail it to the floor with twelve inch nails, and not a whimper would escape it. It's so dead that even flies have given up on it, realising there's no nourishment left in that dried husk. It's so dead that it's not even invited to the parties of other dead things, because it's too lifeless.

Burlesque.

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dyslexius · 25-10-06 23:03:30

The_West_Wind wrote:

Yeah, the whole piece was just too big to present. Mind you that wasnt the whole story, but you can keep someones attention online for that long. I have to be realistic. If I can find something smaller, I'll see what I can do.

Too big?! I don't feel that way. I read your forward, where you introduced the four main characters (one had the fantastic name "Velo", if I recall correctly). I began reading the story, then got distracted and intended to return to it later. When I did, the thread was gone. I so much wanted to read it and I must say I'm disappointed I now cannot! Please, TWW, reconsider once more, and then if your verdict is the same -- okay, I'll accept!

I like the idea of a dedicated thread -- wasn't it called "The Great IFM Write-Off" (at first I was worried it was about some dry accounting problem)? If you decide to start that thread again, maybe we could coax those who are putting writings up here to move them over.

--dyslexius

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blissed · 26-10-06 00:23:53

Burlesque wrote:

You like me, Blissed? When did that happen?
My sex drive is so dead you could nail it to the floor with twelve inch nails, and not a whimper would escape it. It's so dead that even flies have given up on it, realising there's no nourishment left in that dried husk. It's so dead that it's not even invited to the parties of other dead things, because it's too lifeless.
Burlesque.

Burlesque your Mojo has been found!!! I emailed the Swedish national ministry for the advancement of erotic and beneficial sexual relationships and they have it!! It's been there for years you just have to pop down to their clinic and pick it up
Anyway to answer your question, of course I like you

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Burlesque · 26-10-06 00:51:38

Tell them to give it to someone who has use for it. I was always a big one for charity.

Thanks for liking me, Blissed. I like you too. Despite myself.

Burlesque.

aven frey · 26-10-06 04:04:55

Wow a thread to showcase creativity, what a grand idea, thankyou Burlesque and thankyou everyone for showing off!!! Dyslexius totally into that freeform jazz piece!! And Nowaysis I'm with Burlesque blister poem is great!! As for you Blissed but Richard looks more like Burlesque but without the smoke, maybe your psychic lines got intermingled. Seriously great thread, I hope everyone keeps posting their stuff!!! I'm going to post some of my art as soon as my internet gets hooked up in my new place.

blissed · 26-10-06 04:22:32

max wrote:

Richard looks more like Burlesque but without the smoke, maybe your psychic lines got intermingled.

Ahh so it's actually Richard that squints when he's in the throws of ecstasy
I'm glad we've got that sorted out

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dyslexius · 26-10-06 05:48:22

(I moved my poem to the write-off thread)

--dyslexius

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dyslexius · 26-10-06 06:03:02

Nowaysis wrote:

"...I want a good hard snog
with someone else
preferably someone with braces
Cause baby,
you're a blister on my tounge"

There's got to be some band out there who'd love to make a song, "Blister on My Tongue." Nowaysis, it's a winner! I don't know if punkrock is out of vogue, but I think it's perfect for that and you could make a million on lyrics. "There's a man..." has some angst, but to me it seems more universal than just "teen angst." It also implies there is hope for resolution.

Do you sometimes write in English, or are these translations?

--dyslexius

dyslexius · 26-10-06 06:33:20

Dynamo: http://www.soundclick.com ...

You can't hide from Nowasys, Dynamo.
We're looking forward to that Soundclick.com URL of yours.

--dyslexius

dyslexius · 26-10-06 06:40:54

Oh, goody!
TWW went and did it:

http://www.ifeelmyself.com/forum/viewtopic.php?id=829

--dyslexius

dyslexius · 26-10-06 09:04:20

max wrote:

...I'm going to post some of my art as soon as my internet gets hooked up in my new place.

(is that the right icon for "yipee!"?)

--dyslexius

Nowaysis · 26-10-06 09:07:37

dyslexius wrote:

Nowaysis wrote:
"...I want a good hard snog
with someone else
preferably someone with braces
Cause baby,
you're a blister on my tounge"
There's got to be some band out there who'd love to make a song, "Blister on My Tongue." Nowaysis, it's a winner! I don't know if punkrock is out of vogue, but I think it's perfect for that and you could make a million on lyrics. "There's a man..." has some angst, but to me it seems more universal than just "teen angst." It also implies there is hope for resolution.
Do you sometimes write in English, or are these translations?
--dyslexius

I actually did originally imagine it as a song of some kind, but when I sat down to write it (or preserve it), it didn't want to rhyme or have any kind of proper structure. As for the genre, I'm not sure. I've never been good at identifying genres anyway, but some kind of rather ballsy rock thing. Think Danko Jones, but with a tad less attitude and some more instruments.

I do occasionally write in English, and these two are written thusly. I have tried to translate my own stuff sometimes, but it never comes out quite the way it went in, so I've pretty muich given up on that idea.

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